Peer Pitch & Concept Refinement Chart

Portfolio Project Concept Refinement 

Fall 2020 

CATEGORY	DETAILS
Film OR Magazine	Magazine
Genre	Sports and Health
Target Audience (Be specific)	High School and College students, athletes, general audience for sports
What is your concept? (Be thorough & specific. Review the links on Blackboard)	Our concept is covering the general specifics of college and high school sports. We want to cover athletes and how they stay healthy through rigorous diet and training, along with their future. With this we want to discuss how to take the big step from high school to college level athletics, and the large changes one makes doing so.   We also want to cover the major health side of things, and how you necessarily don’t need to play a sport to stay healthy and how somebody can incorporate a strong diet and routine in order to consistently keep progression.
How did you conceive the idea for this concept?	We both have a strong general interest in sports and health, our understanding of these subjects is also very broad and widened, meaning it would be much easier for us to cover these in a magazine
What do you believe is unique about your concept?	Our concept is unique because no other magazine has combined the two. It’s unique because it covers athletes that aren’t already pro. It’s something that magazines don’t really cover; we can go more in depth on certain concepts that aren’t always discussed.
Why do you believe this product will be of interest to your audience?	It will be interesting because it discusses things that other magazines don’t cover. It will also be beneficial to athletes that are trying to change their lifestyle and people that are trying to find motivation to take the next step in their fitness.
FEEDBACK RECEIVED FROM PEERS	Don’t be as broad- We had a lot of ideas on what to include in our magazine but there was too much. The original idea was to do sports and health but now the focus is mainly health. Our magazine will include dieting and other things to stay healthy.   Focus on either just sports or just health- we are now doing just health instead of sports and health. We are going to focus and highlight the major parts of health we find important and will allow for readers to have a better understanding, while also highlighting the most interesting things that will keep a reader's attention.

 

After pitching our ideas to the class, Sandy and I received very little feedback, although it was also the end of the period. However, after reviewing my project with one of my significant peers, and gaining more feedback, we had a great impact on our portfolio. This had great positive impact on our vision of the project, as it helped for us to have a better understanding of what our project should look like and how we can move forward in another direction towards success.  

Peer criticism was helpful, as it helped for us to gain insight in which we need to focus on one general subject instead of two, no matter how interesting we thought we could make it. With this, we decided to tackle the health perspective, as though I am an athlete, while she is not, we both are able to maintain a healthy lifestyle through different means. With this we can also ask the people who surround us, as many are healthy, and use the same routines and diets that we ourselves do. This would majorly help our portfolio, as we are both inclined in this area.  

With this came the challenge of refinery and how we needed to write our portfolio. As though it is a major school project going towards a credit, we also believed we needed to write on health not only because of this and the fact we are healthy ourselves, but because it is something we want to enjoy. Just as Dungy writes about in “The Abundance, Joy, Beauty, Persistence, Power, and Potential of Independent Publishing: A CONVERSATION WITH SIX BLACK EDITORS,” we want to enjoy what we write about as we have strong passion for this subject. As a reader, many people can lose interest by boring filler, but we want to bring something new, and show people the reality, unlike most magazines do. This is important for gaining an audience, we want to keep readers hooked and enjoy our articles, and at the same time, we want to show readers the sense of passion we have for this.  

We believe that focusing on health and pursuing this as our main goal for our projects would lead to greater success, as it is something we enjoy writing about. With major criticism, and a lot of rethinking, this is our best choice. We can discuss plenty about health, and the steps to guide somebody to being fit and staying healthy, but most of all happy. Happiness is a major part of this, whether it be writing the articles and putting the portfolio together ourselves, and whether one determines they want to be happy, and become healthy to change their life for the better.